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I'll collect things
to entertain taste,
Feta sculptures,
Porcelain thoughts,
Spice essence of strange haunts, gaze at ghosts until
graffiti shower smears inside my eyelids
and cracks in the stonework
take on a deeper meaning.
©2006-2009 ~MaskedFarqueharson
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Submitted: July 20, 2006
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This one is highly spaced out, I hope you like and that you get all the concentrated imagery
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No comments, huh? That's odd.
Anyway, I think you could have put "gaze at ghosts until" on a different line. Other than that, it's an excellent poem. The imagery seems to be very focused which is hard to do when being abstract. I like your vocabulary and how you made the piece complete instead of leaving a sort of cliff-hanger ending.

Now I'll take a *breath*.

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And yes, the world
falters
on the vibration of
being broken.
Thanks! This piece was in an exhibition with school and I'm rather fond of it myself. Yes, i thought about that and I can't remember what swayed my decision to keep it on the same line. I think it helps the flow but i'll look at it again
for some reason, this is one of my favorites of yours. i say that about alot of them though.

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:weed: KT
Yes, but i like that, Thanksyou for the favourite :) I wish i could do different signs like a bigger smile.
Yeah but I don't know what buttons to press. (fumble fumble)
beautiful work. i sense the inner rhythm you talk about. you play with words well.
Studied this a few times.

Wonderful. It really is.

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