I'll collect things
to entertain taste,
Feta sculptures,
Porcelain thoughts,
Spice essence of strange haunts, gaze at ghosts until
graffiti shower smears inside my eyelids
and cracks in the stonework
take on a deeper meaning.
I'll collect things to entertain taste, Feta sculptures, Porcelain thoughts, Spice essence of strange haunts, gaze at ghosts until graffiti shower smears inside my eyelids and cracks in the stonework take on a deeper meaning. |
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Anyway, I think you could have put "gaze at ghosts until" on a different line. Other than that, it's an excellent poem. The imagery seems to be very focused which is hard to do when being abstract. I like your vocabulary and how you made the piece complete instead of leaving a sort of cliff-hanger ending.
Now I'll take a *breath*.
--
And yes, the world
falters
on the vibration of
being broken.
--
--
Wonderful. It really is.
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